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Large scale commission for featuring their characters Leeloo the hogmodillo belonging to Zetsubou the slime creature, and Morty the Alligecko belonging to Higeki the cloud creature.
This was my first serious stab at a 'comic', mini as it is. I had fun figuring it out and trying to make it as uniform and cute as possible, also tried to make it read properly.
I am open for commissions, large and small, if interested note me c:
Characters(c) FeyPhoenix
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- Comments:
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- Rating:
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- Category:
- Visual / Digital
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This came out really adorable ^^
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Normally I'd say you need to work on more detail in the background, but considering this was meant to be a mini-comic you don't want a lot of detail in the background to take away from the focus. The shading looks great in the big panel, but in the top mini-panels it's not visible I would suggest either shading all or shading none so that they match up better. Finally, i don't think the grey blur behind the one being shoved works. I feel like you were trying to show that the character will end there, but that's already shown with the curved lines around the body which should be near the front (in the direction he's moving from). It's not a harmful mistake, since someone with a bit of common sense can tell that the character will be moving away from where he's being shoved.
Over-all though I believe you did a good job. The picture really came out well and you captured the expressions well. The images (even just the final panel alone) tells a story in motion (my favorite kind of work) and it looks really nice. ^,^
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Thank you, and thank you for taking the time to give me critique! I can see what you are getting at, and ill have to remember those points for any other mini-comics I might do(as for the backgrounds, I do have a large issue with these all the time, so ill do my best to work on these more!)
Im glad they did tell a story though c:
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