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Dragon Rage: The First War chp. 60 by Red Dragonette (critique requested)

Dragon Rage: The First War chp. 60 (critique requested)

Red Dragonette

After two years, I finally have this chapter uploaded. Gee, it sure took a long time. Us RPers need to hurry up and post. The beginning of the next chapter will continue right where Minerva and Ronan left off. I'll also be looking forward to when we get back to Atlas and Kathia in the story. I just need to wait for the right time to bring them in, because their next scenes take place at night, and Minerva is still in the daytime as I write.

Also, after finishing Draco's 6th giftstory, I have discovered that the Axle's restless scene takes place before Spinx goes to Sundown. So, I decided to rearrange that order in Chapter 39 to make it correct. Also, I moved the Chi and Zeditha meets Petey scenes in the gifts over to Chapter 24, since they meet after the horde's deployed assassins get defeated.

Differences from the RP:

  • Minerva and Ronan didn't go to a graphic designer and just go to the printing serviceman for both printing and graphic design. I didn't know how a printing service worked until I researched it.

Facts that might not be mentioned later:

  • Ronan hadn't had coffee in a while.
  • Ronan could tell the customers had eyes on them. Mostly due to his weapons that he carried. His sword and short blade. Though no one knew about his hidden blade.
  • Ronan intends to make Minerva his first student. He sees potential in her and wants her to see it, too.
  • There are many aspects of civilization that are completely foreign to Ronan, but he'd of course do his best to adapt. He is used to the traditional methods.
  • When talking to the shop owner about the flier, it isn't that Ronan couldn't go over the details, but he believed Minerva could do it better than he can.
  • The symbol on Ronan's gauntlet is the assassin symbol. He intends to use his master's symbol to honor him.

Atlas, Aeolus, Kathia, Minerva, Danielle, Kylie, Eitri, Hewey and Whitney (c) me
Axle, Merkarth, Azera and Luco (c) lorddraco8967 from Fanfiction.net
Ronan and Drake (c) LordTorch18 (this is his profile: https://forums.dragcave.net/profile/68207-lordtorch18/ )
Yopple (c) Randomness-Central from Deviant Art
Salvo (c) SparksflY (this is her profile: https://forums.dragcave.net/index.php?showuser=213338 )
Sargoth (c) Cenor (this is her profile: https://forums.dragcave.net/profile/213868-cenor/ )
Bolz (c) RainbowtheAlbinoServal (this is her profile: https://forums.dragcave.net/profile/231389-rainbowthealbinoserval/ )

You can see the RP at this following link: http://forums.dragcave.net/index.php?showtopic=152686&st=0

Great War: Dragons vs Humans (c) picknick10
Story written by me
Dragon Cave (c) TJ09 (a.k.a. T.J. Lipscomb)

List of chapters
Prologue - https://www.weasyl.com/~reddragonette/submissions/2059799/dragon-rage-the-first-war-prologue
Chapter 1 - https://www.weasyl.com/~reddragonette/submissions/2059807/dragon-rage-the-first-war-chp-1
Chapter 26 - https://www.weasyl.com/~reddragonette/submissions/2066204/dragon-rage-the-first-war-chp-26
Chapter 51 - https://www.weasyl.com/~reddragonette/submissions/2075140/dragon-rage-the-first-war-chp-51
Chapter 52 - https://www.weasyl.com/~reddragonette/submissions/2075359/dragon-rage-the-first-war-chp-52
Chapter 53 - https://www.weasyl.com/~reddragonette/submissions/2076400/dragon-rage-the-first-war-chp-53
Chapter 54 - https://www.weasyl.com/~reddragonette/submissions/2076605/dragon-rage-the-first-war-chp-54
Chapter 55 - https://www.weasyl.com/~reddragonette/submissions/2076960/dragon-rage-the-first-war-chp-55
Chapter 56 - https://www.weasyl.com/~reddragonette/submissions/2077623/dragon-rage-the-first-war-chp-56
Chapter 57 - https://www.weasyl.com/~reddragonette/submissions/2079085/dragon-rage-the-first-war-chp-57
Chapter 58 - https://www.weasyl.com/~reddragonette/submissions/2079416/dragon-rage-the-first-war-chp-58
Chapter 59 - https://www.weasyl.com/~reddragonette/submissions/2080724/dragon-rage-the-first-war-chp-59
Chapter 60 - Here!

Table of Giftstories - https://www.weasyl.com/submissions?userid=195211&folderid=114231