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The Clearing - Request for DraconicTreasure by Moved Accounts... (critique requested)
A request for of a pair of Layleauxian Koba slinking through a sketchy-looking swamp. Requested here: https://www.weasyl.com/journal/85954/doing-requests-just-so-ya-know
After 5 weeks in development, hopefully, it'll have been worth the weight. Between getting a job for the summer and a little too much CS:GO in my schedule, I took way longer to finish this than I ought to have. I am looking to do a digital painting off this sketch at some point, thus damning the piece back into the purgatory of procrastination.
HB and 4B graphite pencils.
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Thanks for your feedback! Can't really say anything about the slowness when I took a month to finish the piece. :/
As I said, I am interested in doing a colored version of this, and I will try to work on the areas you mentioned once I get on that. First off, I want to spend more time studying swampy landscapes in order to create a more compelling environment, especially since I wanted that to be a key element to the piece.
Of course, I probably won't finish it for weeks. Procrastination, ya know?
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Just kidding. I'll finish the last request, then get right on coloring. I'm starting to pick up steam again.
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I'm sorry for being slow in giving feedback. Work and lack of sleep. Woo finally getting a day to pass out over night! Now, onto the feedback!
I really like how you've done this one. It has an odd feeling of forlornness to it; in part because of the look on their faces. Nothing at all wrong with that, because that sensation can lead to many stories and makes the viewer ask questions. "What has lead them to this place? Are they fleeing from something? Or is this the tragic start to an epic journey?"
From a critique stand point, the trees, though a very nice touch, look more akin to your standard type of tree that you'd see in a park; A maple or birch or what have you. They don't seem to be quite the kind of tree you'd see in a swampy area like a mangrove forest. That said, that feedback is based entirely on opinion and limited knowledge on my part. I look at it from a perspective of 'how high does the tides get in that area, and how will the trees handle the constant ebb and flow of water'?
Their garb is nicely done; I like the folds of cloth and how that's been done up. The shading is nice, though with a tree cover as thick as it feels, seeing the rays of light poking through seems.. hum.. difficult. To 'correct' that, perhaps more branches could be visible, rather thank having them all lost in leaves?
Beyond that, anything else would really require I go looking for stuff to nit pick. Maybe the legs being more plantigrade in form and shape rather than digitigrade, but that's again more a personal taste thing compared to anything that's incorrect anatomy wise.
Maybe the height of the mother's hand on the tree, but again, that's questionable; when viewing the angle of her fingers, it looks like she's reaching downward a bit, rather than holding from an upward position, and even then it really doesn't look out of place or incorrect.