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The Pathfinders – Complete by wwwolf (critique requested)

The Pathfinders – Complete (critique requested)

wwwolf

Excerpt from chapter 1:

“Out of the way!” I nearly tripped over a rat out in the alleyway. She was doing nothing more offensive than hanging up her laundry. It was I who burst upon the scene, nearly trampling her and sending her washing all over the dirt streaked pavement.

And the fact I couldn't see for a few moments, my eyes obscured by someone's tighty-whities, did not help.

“Sorry!” I called back as I skidded around the next corner.

Her reply wasn't so civil.

Bugger. Where in all the nine underworlds was I? I'd made a left at the last intersection, then a right... or was it another left? I was so freaking lost in this endless maze of alleyways that I could just as well be up in Richmond for all I knew.

And that was not a good thing.

Tongue out and panting, I spared a quick glance behind me as my black claws skidded around another hairpin turn between these cracked and sagging red brick buildings. There was barely enough room between them for the alley, my shoulders were nearly brushing the brickwork.

I may not know where I was, and I may not know where I'm going, but I knew for a fact that I did not want to stop running.

The hunter couldn't be more than a dozen strides behind me.

I charged through this man made maze sounding like nothing so much as a steamroller, the hunter was whisper quiet behind. I couldn't even hear so much as footfalls over my racing heart, but I know the hunter was there.

I'm a wolf, my name's Tommy.

Another few strides and I came face first to a brick wall. A dead end.

Bugger.

What now?

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Thanks to everyone who read and commented. It's great to know you enjoyed the story.

I'm more than open to comments and critiques as I need to decide where to go from here. If you liked it or hated it, please let me know!

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