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I Love You More (Than is Fair for One) by Valentine (critique requested)

I saw what could be perfect

It seemed it made sense just to me

That because of our attraction

Instead of two, we could be three

Thinking of us, my mind feels so clear

And losing you both is something I fear

It’s not a phase, my love is sincere

Let’s lie in our bed, just you, him and me

So being just for one of you

It was never meant for me

I was wanting different things

And wanting them all instantly

I thought rather than each, being alone

And having too much love inside

I think each of us can be better

From what the others would provide

Thinking of us, my mind feels so clear

And losing you both is something I fear

It’s not a phase, my love is sincere

Let’s lie in our bed, just you, him and me

I’m not saying there won’t be problems,

In relationships, this is true

But don’t mistake it when I say

For both I’ll see it through

Thinking of us, my mind feels so clear

And losing you both is something I fear

It’s not a phase, my love is sincere

Let’s lie in our bed, just you, him and me

I Love You More (Than is Fair for One) (critique requested)

Valentine

This is the first song i've written for FAWM this year, and well, my first FAWM song i've ever finished and submitted in fact. It's been through a lot of changes, almost solely based around the chorus.

I wrote it to show the romantic side of polyamorous relationships, I like to think i've learnt a lot about them over the past year or so, and how they can work.

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