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Utunu Backstory (WIP) - Chapter 2 - Visitor by Utunu (critique requested)
Next chapter of my Utunu backstory! See the first chapter here: https://www.weasyl.com/submission/931170/utunu-backstory-wip-chapter-1-solstice
Again, comments and critiques are welcomed! :)
Story and characters therein are copyright me (Utunu)
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Yay! I'm glad you liked it. :) And happy that Safi has added a bit of intrigue there!
With the intimacy, as I continue with this particular Utunu story, I feel that I want to reserve any more descriptive intimacy for occurrence(s) within the story where it would bring a level of importance, rather than indulging 'just because'. Although, the prospect of the lost 'Chapter 1.5' is attractive... ;)-
All the teasing! xD And that definitely sounds like a good desire to have, reserving it for when it matters the most can make it all that more enjoyable for both the writer and the readers! Although I would certainly enjoy reading a 'lost chapter' like that either way x3
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I hope there will come more!
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I would like to see a drawing of Safi :)
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What an interesting encounter! I'm very curious about Safi, what he's doing out there, and if it's a love of music that drew him up there, or if Utunu's musical skills are simply so wonderful that ANYONE would clamber on up there to hang around for a bit x3
Also, I like how you've alluded to the intimacy that has and will take place, with this story sitting nicely between the two! I'm not sure how else to describe it, but I really like how you've set it up :3