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The Animal I have Become chapter 4 by lycanthrochick (critique requested)

I woke up the next morning feeling a bit groggy. I looked around the room, my vision extremely blurry. I didn’t recognise any of the blurred colours or shapes around me. I slowly got up and put my glasses on, looking around again. Everything slowly became clear, and I realised I was in Tony’s bedroom. I looked back at the bed, and saw Tony, who was lying there fast asleep. I sat on the bed thinking about last night. Did we... do it? I couldn’t remember. I stood up and looked around the room. There were loads of ornaments and paintings of animals decorating the room. Most of them were wolves, but there were some others too, such as foxes and lions. I picked up a wolf statuette and examined it carefully. The detail was amazing.

‘You like it?’ A voice asked behind me. I jumped and nearly dropped the wolf ornament. I managed to catch it and put it back where I found it, then turned round and saw Tony standing there, ‘Oh hello. Yeah, I think I do.’

‘You can have it if you want.’

‘Oh... err... no thanks.’

‘Did you enjoy last night?’ He asked me smiling

‘Err... I can’t remember much...’ I replied, blushing slightly.

‘Ah yes, that tends to happen to new werewolves.’ He said with a smile.

I nodded weakly, ‘Can you remember what happened?’

‘Yes I can,’ He nodded smiling broadly.

I nodded absent-mindedly and looked into his blue eyes, ‘Did we...?’ I trailed off, embarrassed to say.

He nodded again, ‘Yes we did.’ I looked down, not knowing what to say. I lost my virginity, and I can’t remember it happening. I felt something warm touch my belly and realised he was hugging me from behind. I looked at his hands and held them. They were so warm compared to mine, I wanted to hold them forever.

After what seemed like a short time I looked at my watch and gasped, ‘I need to get home.’

‘I’ll take you home,’ He said. I nodded, and he gently took my hand and walked with me back to my place. As we walked along I thought about my lycanthropy and Tony. Who bit me? Was it Tony? It would make sense, as it seems a coincidence that he was there for me not long after I became a werewolf. But he seems so nice. He couldn’t possibly be the one who cursed me. Could he?

We arrived at my house, and I nervously walked up to the door. I slowly raised my hand, but I lowered it and ran to Tony’s side ‘I can’t do it’

‘Do you want me to do it?’

I looked at him and nodded slightly. He walked over to the door and rang the doorbell. After a few moments the door opened and my father was standing there. He glared at him, ‘What do you want?’

‘I’ve come to return your daughter.’ He calmly replied.

‘Where is she?’

‘She’s right here.’ I looked up nervously. My father did not look happy, ‘Where the hell have you been?’ I looked down, unable to think of a believable excuse.

‘She was studying at my place, when she came down with what I believe was some kind of stomach bug, and I think she left her phone here, so she couldn’t call you.’

My father glared at him, ‘Get outta here.’ Tony nodded and walked away, leaving me at the mercy of my father. I looked at the ground as he gave me a lecture about being out all night and told me to go to my room. I whimpered and slowly went to my room. If I had a tail, it would be between my legs right now. I lay on my bed thinking about Tony and what we did last night.

Later that night I looked out of the window and, to my horror, saw the full moon was out. I rushed to the front door and snuck out to the woods, looking around to see if anyone was following me. There wasn’t, so I headed straight for the centre of the woods. When I reach the centre, I looked around again, my sense of sight, hearing and especially smell heightened to an amazing level. I looked but didn’t see anything, except some kind of bird of prey. Not sure what it was, maybe an eagle, or a hawk. I didn’t think it was important so I turned around and took off my clothes, preparing myself for the transformation. The familiar jolt of pain shot up my spine and I fell to my knees. The fur started to grow on my hands and my nails turned black and grew into claws. I felt the base of my spine extend and become a tail. My limbs painfully reconfigured into wolf legs and my hands and feet became wolf paws. Finally I felt my nose and mouth area stretch into a canine muzzle and my teeth grew into fangs. I collapsed with exhaustion, panting heavily.

A while later, I woke up and felt something on my shoulder. I yelped and took a few steps away from whatever touched me. A soft, comforting voice called out, ‘Hey, hold on. I’m not gonna hurt you or anything... I’m trying to help you!’ I looked at the source of the voice and saw a girl about my age, with long blonde hair and a very trustworthy face. At least, I felt I could trust her, but for some reason, I couldn’t. I didn’t understand why. My ears had drooped and my tail was between my legs. The girl knelt down in front of me with her hands out in a non-threatening way, ‘See? I’m not going to hurt you. I promise!’ I gingerly took a couple of steps towards her.

She slowly raised her hand towards me, and I slowly walked towards her, sniffing the air and then her hand until I touched it with my nose and rubbed against it. Then I felt her other hand run through my fur. It felt so relaxing, I felt I could stay here and let her stroke me. She spoke again, ‘...see? There we go. Nothing to be scared of here...’ I felt a hand under my chin and she lifted my head to look in my eyes, ‘...now, are you still in there at all, or am I going to have to wait till morning?

I knew I was in here, but when I tried to speak, the only noise that came out of my mouth was a small wolfy grunt. The girl looked at me cluelessly, ‘...can you nod if you can understand me?’

I looked at her and nodded.

‘Wonderful!’ Her eyes glistened and she smiled at me. ‘So how long have you been a werewolf?’ She asked before realising her mistake. ‘...well... I suppose you can’t exactly talk, can you...’

I opened my mouth but only grunted again, so I closed it and shook my head.

“...hmm...” She sat down and crossed her legs. “Well... what do you normally do when this sort of thing happens?” She sat thinking, before realising what she just said, “... aw crap. Another question you probably can’t answer...”

I gave a small wolfy smile and rested my head on her knees looking up at her. She scratched gently behind my ears. “Umm... so... how long does this all last? Until morning or something?” I thought about that and then slowly nodded. She smiled and scratched behind my ears again, “Cool!” But no sooner had she said it than a yawn started bubbling up within her. “...uh oh,” she said as it escaped. “...i-it’s really late... perhaps we could get some sleep?”

I thought about it and nodded again. She lay down on the ground, and after smoothing out her skirt, she curled up. “Boy it’s cold tonight.” She said, shivering a little bit and hugging her knees to her chest.

Then, she reached out and gently rubbed me on the back of my head. “Goodnight”

I murmured and wagged my tail happily as she hugged me to stay warm, but almost immediately after, she fell asleep.

I woke up the next morning in my human form, completely naked. The girl was still asleep next to me. I found my clothes and looked at my watch, realising I needed to get home. I ran as fast as I could, sneaked in and quickly got ready for college.

Time seemed to pass surprisingly quickly, and before I knew it I was in my first class, listening to our (rather boring) lecturer. About ten minutes later, the door opened and a girl came in breathlessly, ‘Sorry I’m late, I missed the bus.’

I looked up and realised it was the girl I saw last night.

‘That’s okay. Just find a seat and someone to copy notes from,’ replied the lecturer. She sat in the only available seat, the one next to me, and briefly looked at me, then looked at the blackboard. The she looked at me again, ‘It’s you!’ she exclaimed. I blushed slightly and whispered, ‘We’ll talk after class.’

After class we met up in the college’s cafe to talk about the night before, when Emma came up, ‘So, how do you two know each other?’ she asked

‘We met last night. Oh, I’m Kira by the way,’ the girl replied. She looked at me, ‘Does she know?’ I shook my head.

Emma looked confused, ‘Do I know what?’

I gulped and invited her to sit down, ‘I have to tell you something...’

She looked at me, ‘Go on...’

I took a deep breath, ‘... I’m a werewolf...’

‘Seriously?’

I nodded shyly.

‘Wow... How long have you been a werewolf?’

‘Not long. A week or two.’

‘Well... I guess I should tell you my secret,’ she said, ‘I’m a vampire.’

My jaw dropped and I stared at her, ‘Okay... I guess I should’ve expected that,’ I replied.

‘Well, I’m a shapeshifter,’ Kira piped up. I chuckled, ‘So all three of us are supernatural.’

‘Yeah. Wanna go and get something to eat?’ asked Emma.

‘Sure,’ Kira and I replied. We picked up our backpacks and went to the nearest food shop (the food at the university is not good). We walked to the shop talking about what was new, I briefly mentioned Tony, then realised I hadn’t seen him recently. I guessed he was busy or something. We arrived at the store and picked up some food (I got a BLT sandwich and a chocolate bar) and sat outside, talking more about what it’s like being a werewolf/vampire/shapeshifter. I was nibbling my chocolate while listening to the other two, when suddenly I gasped as I felt a sharp pain in my stomach. Kira and Emma looked me, ‘What’s wrong?’

I tried to speak but for some reason I couldn’t. I felt like I was going to be sick, so I got up to go into the public toilets, but then my legs gave way and I collapsed on the hard floor. All the sounds faded and everything slowly went black...

The Animal I have Become chapter 4 (critique requested)

lycanthrochick

And chapter 4. This will be my last one for a while. No idea when chapter 5 will be uploaded

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