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you don't know what did I do when I saw your comment hehe
I took my glasses out and wear them and cleaned my desk so nothing can distract me from reading your comment.thanks for everything . . reading . . re-reading . . commenting . . and reviewing my comic
I honestly didn't know it's been 4 years already !! I thought only 2 years . . it's a long period nonetheless !
can I say that you are the first person who got almost everything right !
I didn't explain the story to anyone except my friend who helps me editing/grammar checking my comic
because English is my 3rd language or 4th so I tend to use simple words and my comic uses deeper ideas and thoughts some of them reflects my life and my story
for sure not 100% but at least inspired hehe
disclaimer:
the events between chapter 1 and 2 are 48 hrs only or maybe less !!
chapter 1 showed the company's interview . . and the point from that chapter is to show how vast the cast is . . and I showed many characters very quickly and Alex is still the focal point . . but it doesn't mean he is the protagonist.I can't rub the names every time . . and the story doesn't mentions the names that often . . maybe I need to make more afterwords here and there or summary before any updates ( thanks for your point).
in LOE world . . something big is happening in the background
and that shows that the world is moving and not waiting for anyone not Alex . . not De Rosso . . no one
and Alex's story is like a small part of it . . . but he will be the focal point....
it's true . . that Alex has some issues with his past and we need to wait more to know what did happen to him
and De Rosso from chapter 2 is hiding something or he is just afraid to open up . . and for sure he knows Alex
but we don't know how . . or why ?back in chapter 1
we saw De Rosso in the blue uniform but in chapter 2 we saw him in the cafe's uniform
so that might be interesting to some people . . or maybe not hehe...............................
for more discussions we can talk in twitter or discord
I was thinking to make simple Q&A video but not sure about thatstay safe
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All right, this was quite the journey. It took us 4 years since the first page. Allow me to use this opportunity to talk about some stuff.
Your comic in genuinely well drawn, and really sets a mood, but I have some trouble following the story.
I had to look really hard to find info that the protagonist is called "Alex De". I understand that it'd be unnatural for it to be mentioned time and time again, but with it not appearing in the tags, the description of the page, nor any real summary of the comic, it is easy to forget.
Regarding the individual chapters:
Chapter 1 shows a job interview. We see several characters. We learn some stuff about Alex'es past.
Chapter 2 seems to suggest that Alex didn't get the job, so he looks for whatever he can (but it's not that clear). He's getting dragged into an interview for a job at a cafe. The owner seems to be someone who knows Alex. Most likely his father. There is also the reveal that Alex has some health problems related to his blood.
I don't quite know what to expect. I see several plot-threats being open now:
I can't tell what the comic centers around. Is it a story of a father and a son reuniting? Does it involve a corporation, its secrets and some bigger overarching plot that wasn't really revealed yet?
I can't quite tell for sure... Of course, its been just 2 chapters, but it has been 4 years since things started, and it feels weird that even after so long, I'm not sure.... I think it would help to be a bit more focused.
But this is just my personal opinion. I'm just trying to offer constructive criticism.