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What's The Matter Man by Bartan

What's The Matter Man

Bartan

Another inflation bit from the bear!

This one's another attempt at Muscle Inflation. I tried this a year or so ago with another piece titled Gaining Momentum. It was... Alright, but the 'Muscle' part was just a small section on the casserole that was that story. I mean, it did have it, but it was buried under an entire mess of other things that really came out... Strange. Not bad, but definitely strange and not quite what people were looking for.

This one should be though. A little on the short side (10~ pages), but it does kinda get right into it. I did A: have a LOT of help from Jinx (https://www.furaffinity.net/user/jinxmontalgo/) on this one and B: had a thought of using the proper/scientific names for the muscles based on an anatomy piece he showed me. One that numbered and listen them like a diagram.

I started doing that, but after giving Jinx the first draft... He said it broke the immersion quite a bit (coming from someone who knew them quite well). So, as much as I do like tangential learning, we trashed that idea to keep the pacing and flow of this piece better.

However, that did result in this piece repeating itself quite a bit. I do admit that it does get a bit samey, there's not really much else to do with it, I'm afraid. It's not quite my thing (I like muscle, but This is a little too big for my tastes), but if you enjoy just plain air inflation and big bellies... Hell, you'll likely enjoy this. Just think of it as blowing up different areas slowly.

What's The Matter Man (c) Rollins Band
Fun fact: I almost went with Britney Spears' "Stronger" for this title. Yeah. Just a thought.

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