I thought I was happy with the reworks so far, but after this one all I can see is how they're all still wrong. I'm probably gonna go back and tweak them some more, at least for the stuff that really bothers me. At least one of them is getting taken down and reposted, it needs so much work.
I'm still happier with this than the original, but it frustrated me to no end, and I gave up for "good enough" on the things I just couldn't quite figure out. I'm just ready to move on for a while.
Old version here
Niv is mine