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Dont stay awake: Short story (Draft/unfinished) by NeoMawz (critique requested)

Dont stay awake: Short story (Draft/unfinished) (critique requested)

NeoMawz

Heya! I originally posted this to Wattpad but deleted it because I wanted to finish it first. However, I'm nearly at the ending now and I wanted some critique before publishing. This is still in the draft stages so I'm less worried about grammar and such then I am the actual plot. I really hate the first part, (I guess that's what I get for starting with a wake-up scene,) but I'm not sure what to do with it. Though it would be interesting starting off with her being caught, It sets up the characters appearance and her reason for going outside in the first place, so I'm not sure about just deleting it. Maybe I should just rewrite it? Idk, feel free to give feedback in the comments or on the doc itself.

Also, the cover art is very old but that's vaguely what Silkya looks like (The white and long-eared character) I don't have a ref for her sister yet, as I only created her as I was writing oops. The tiger/fox character isn't relevant yet.

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