Lavender Scent by LiteralGrill (critique requested)

Lavender scent drifts palely into the room,
As sun and moon trade places in the sky.
Sadness shall find nothing here but doom.
For here it shall find my true love and I.

As sun and moon trade places in the sky,
fate shall grant us power for a kiss.
For here it shall find my true love and I
in the palms of Cupid’s purest bliss.

Fate shall grant us power for a kiss
So passionate the Milky Way will blush
In the palms of Cupid’s purest bliss
With cheerful giggles that will never hush

So passionate the Milky Way will blush
And there is such a place that then
With cheerful giggles that will never hush
The world will know what happens when

And there is a place that then
Sadness shall find nothing here but doom
The world will know what happens when
Lavender scent drifts palely into the room

Lavender Scent (critique requested)

LiteralGrill

12 September 2017 at 13:44:52 MDT

This is a poem I wrote a long time ago in the form of a pantoum. Ah to be in love and so romanced~ I wanted to share some poetry here along with my stories so here this is! I'd be happy to take and critique even though it's an older work, always looking to improve.

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