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Intertwined Forever WIP by DanteRageWolfington (critique requested)

Intertwined Forever WIP

When you touched my soul, you made me shudder, only if at first. When I told you how I felt, you said you felt something too. I felt so alone till I met you, in tears I burst. When I saw you, it made my heart beat a little faster, like it could have flew.

Theres only so many words, that I could use, to..describe..how..I..felt. You mean the world to me, you're like a splinter of love, yet now you're like a home. These moments we have together, they make me burn on up, its like I'm just gonna melt. Lets run away, together on our own, do you wanna roam?

I don't wanna die, because that would mean, that I'd have to leave you. I don't know, I just don't know, if I could do that, cause if I did.....I'd lose my mind. Without you I'd be lost again, just another wondering soul, trying find you. With you in my life, I can be happy, no matter what, you are my bind.

Please tell me, is it just me, or do you feel the same? Would ya love me, until the end? do you think this is game? Well I don't, just lend me your hand! OH Oh..OOoooh

Intertwined Forever WIP (critique requested)

DanteRageWolfington

I was listening to When you Wake up by TJ Smith cause a friend asked me to........well, it inspired this little piece =3

PLEASE, do NOT steal my work, you may USE it as long as you give proper credit. If you think it MIGHT be personal ASK me before using it. If you'd like to give any lyrics I post a try by singing them, PLEASE do, again, if its personal, or you think it might be, ask, I'll probably let you still, but I appreciate the honorable thing of asking.

Link to TJ Smith When you wake up: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wIEbt3RhX1E

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