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April Fools' Truth by Shadowwolfcat (critique requested)

Looking bored at the screen,
I wonder  how stupid right now I seem.
With a blank face, not showing emotion,
my eyes are fixated on the reflection of my erosion.
"Aren't you quite a forlorn person"
you comment without a clear reason.
Regardless of how much time passes by,
I stay the same, forever to cry,
without a single tear in my eye,
while I scream on the inside, only to hear you lie
about how everything was alright,
in this world where we must fight.
As I look back on the past,
I see things which do not last.

Everyone has a meaning,
like how there is a pinch to every feeling.
"Don't worry. Don't worry.
You're young so it's normal to feel blurry."
That's not right, not right at all!
If I don't know, I'm destined to fall.
Ah, how I envy you on the screen,
giving all those people smiles which beam.
The reason behind that little tick of yours
is that you are a person who already knows
what they want to achieve and strive for
whilst I am left to sulk on the floor.
"Why don't I know?" I ask myself this.
It seems that in my mind everything is a mess.
There are so many things I want from this life.
I don't think one will be enough for them all to set flight.
As I'm left with this panicking feeling,
more time by me is so simply fleeting.
Not enough, not enough, I can't do anything
as more sorrow my inactivity continues to bring.
"Why not try something new? Why are you so afraid?"
"Because I'm scared of the mistakes others have made."


Ah the screen has turned black.
Shaking in the dark, how do I get the power back?
"You are so dumb." you laugh suddenly in my face
and abruptly come to embrace
the me who is scared of being useless
and say "At being yourself you are already the best.
Even if you don't get famous out there,
surely someone will notice the talent you bear.
And if you think you don't have one at all,
then this stupid joke is the reason you fall."

Watching you in the darkness, without being mean
"How did you get out of the screen?"
I ask and you only give a smile so smooth
"This is your April Fools' Truth."
You said as you faded away.
The lights came on in that instant
and I looked at the screen with excitement.
~ Sekan is the word of the day.~

April Fools' Truth (critique requested)

Shadowwolfcat

Something I made up today, on April Fools. I know it's not hilarious, nor comedic. Quite honestly, I don't think this is the best poem I have made, but it portrays my current feeling of uselessness, since it's a holiday, but I'm not doing anything productive -_-" I have no motivation to finish the drawings I have started, not even Pararelli, which I was enthusiastic about. So, since it was made today, I decided to just go ahead and post it somewhere.

NOTE: At the end, 'sakan' means prosperous, active, successful, hearty, vigorous, extensive. It was the 'word of the day' at the site I'm learning Japanese from...alright, so I saw it on April Fools and when I looked at the date it was posted, it said it had put up on 25th March, but I had already finished writing....Don't blame me. It was my 'word of the day'.

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