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Ancient Kingdom Hearts: The First Masters chp. 26 by Red Dragonette (critique requested)

Ancient Kingdom Hearts: The First Masters chp. 26 (critique requested)

Red Dragonette

2 December 2021 at 13:41:15 MST

Originally uploaded on Aug 26, 2019

On the previous chapter, I forgot to mention that the part where the apprentices go through the burning town was not originally in the RP, just like how the fight between LimeX and the keybladers in Dusk Meadow weren't. I didn't have the posts for what happens between Chase & the gang going into Dusk Meadow and returning back to Halloween Town, so I had to make these extra scenes on my own to fill in that missing gap.

Anyway, I suppose this is where the bad writing starts (if you didn't count Hitomi going with the others to fight LimeX as bad writing and irresponsible on Chase's part). I mean we now have 2 inexperienced children fighting and risking their lives to take down an arsonic killer. I can't believe we did that in the RP years ago. The bad writing will get worse from here on out in more ways than one until the end of the arc.

Glacies, Chase, Kumo, LimeX and Juliet (c) me
Zephyr and Hitomi (c) psyshock (this is her profile: https://forums.dragcave.net/profile/70864-psyshock/ )
Sakura and Bill (c) ShadowNekoSakura (this is her profile: https://forums.dragcave.net/profile/69841-shadownekosakura/ )
Thage (c) Gistofeverything (this is her profile: https://forums.dragcave.net/profile/120849-gistofeverything/ )
Jack Skellington and Zero (c) Disney

Kingdom Hearts (c) Disney and Square-Enix

Keyblade War RP was made by Psyshock, but unfortunately it no longer exists as the RP died from inactivity years ago.

Keyblade War arc
Intro - https://www.weasyl.com/~reddragonette/submissions/2056066/ancient-kingdom-hearts-the-first-masters-intro
Chapter 1 - https://www.weasyl.com/~reddragonette/submissions/2056070/ancient-kingdom-hearts-the-first-masters-chp-01

A Month's Peace arc
Chapter 16 - https://www.weasyl.com/~reddragonette/submissions/2079060/ancient-kingdom-hearts-the-first-masters-chp-16

Chasing LimeX arc
Chapter 23 - https://www.weasyl.com/~reddragonette/submissions/2079408/ancient-kingdom-hearts-the-first-masters-chp-23
Chapter 24 - https://www.weasyl.com/~reddragonette/submissions/2079411/ancient-kingdom-hearts-the-first-masters-chp-24
Chapter 25 - https://www.weasyl.com/~reddragonette/submissions/2079421/ancient-kingdom-hearts-the-first-masters-chp-25
Chapter 26 - Here!
Chapter 27 - https://www.weasyl.com/~reddragonette/submissions/2079601/ancient-kingdom-hearts-the-first-masters-chp-27
Chapter 28 - https://www.weasyl.com/~reddragonette/submissions/2079603/ancient-kingdom-hearts-the-first-masters-chp-28
Chapter 29 - https://www.weasyl.com/~reddragonette/submissions/2079636/ancient-kingdom-hearts-the-first-masters-chp-29
Chapter 30 - https://www.weasyl.com/~reddragonette/submissions/2079650/ancient-kingdom-hearts-the-first-masters-chp-30
Chapter 31 - https://www.weasyl.com/~reddragonette/submissions/2079656/ancient-kingdom-hearts-the-first-masters-chp-31
Chapter 32 - https://www.weasyl.com/~reddragonette/submissions/2079662/ancient-kingdom-hearts-the-first-masters-chp-32
Chapter 33 - https://www.weasyl.com/~reddragonette/submissions/2079804/ancient-kingdom-hearts-the-first-masters-chp-33

Light's Retribution arc
Chapter 34 - https://www.weasyl.com/~reddragonette/submissions/2083697/ancient-kingdom-hearts-the-first-masters-chp-34