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Dragon Rage: The First War (Eveeoni's giftstory 6) by Red Dragonette (critique requested)

Dragon Rage: The First War (Eveeoni's giftstory 6) (critique requested)

Red Dragonette

Originally uploaded on Jan 28, 2019

So for those who don't know, Eveeoni is dead. Here is what happened: I literally cried when I read the news picknick10 shared with me. Everyone she knew, her fans and I are going to miss her. Though only her spirit will read them, I will continue to make giftstories for her in her honor and try to keep her characters in-character.

And no disrespect to you, Eveeoni, but I don't agree with Kai's suggestion on how to handle someone when angry. Hitting someone when you're angry doesn't solve the problem, in fact, it makes things worse between you and the other you're angry at. I know, I because when I was in middle school, I slapped a bully and she slapped me back harder. We both got into trouble for it by the school staff. If somebody else was in her situation, they probably might have done worse like plot some revenge scheme to get back at me later. So Nick has the right idea in keeping his distance from Akuma. Time away from each other is a good way for two people to cool off and think about what they've done.

And I don't know if I already mentioned this but, Eveeoni has implemented into the lore that transportation/shipment of goods are taken over by dragons except on a payment/trade basis. So supplies do still come into Windfall fine and are moved across the shops just the same or by beasts of burden such as horses. Beasts of burden and dragons are more maneuverable in thick crowds than things like automobiles. Otherwise the traffic would be backed up worse than NYC.

So since I didn't get the idea to do a facts reveal during the writing of Draco8967's first giftstory, I'll tell you what Akuma's thoughts were during his first meeting with Axle and Strider. Akuma had grown up around a lot of dead things, so he doesn't really feel grieve anymore. Perhaps Albel had rubbed off on him more than he had first thought, he did feel proud to have killed a dragon by himself. Akuma sees Axle as similar to Fayt and obnoxious in his eyes. He even thought about sinking his poisonous fangs into Axle while Strider's back is turned and then flee after. But then he thinks about selfishly using Axle and Strider for food and shelter like he had done with Nick. Even when playing nicely around humans and ragons for his own benefit or not, Akuma still has trouble holding his act with his dislike of them. Akuma also doesn't know where he got his own name from.

Differences from the RP:

  • The news Crowe gives to Woltar is actually good news in that most of the dragons in Rudvich had escaped back to Solomos and have left their home continent virtually untouched. I changed this because I thought that would have gone against the story's setting and plot.

Facts that might not be mentioned later:

  • Nick is very good at acting as if someone doesn't exist. He does it so well that he could almost trick himself into believing it.

Akuma, Albel, Fayt, Kai, Woltar and Crowe (c) Eveeoni from Deviant Art
Nick (c) picknick10 from Deviant Art
Axle, Strider, Spinx and Marc (c) lorddraco8967 from

You can see the RP at this following link:

Great War: Dragons vs Humans (c) picknick10 from Deviant Art
Story written by me
Dragon Cave (c) TJ09 (a.k.a. T.J. Lipscomb)

List of chapters
Prologue -
Chapter 1 -
Chapter 26 -
Chapter 51 -

Table of Giftstories -