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I figured I'd post the first chapter of the novel I'm working on here, since I haven't been posting very much of late. It may stay up, it may not, but at least now you guys know I'm not lying about actually writing this.
I read through this again before copying the text to its own document, and kept finding more things I wanted to change, and I changed them, but I really need to just stop. I think editing is like an addiction. (I found a typo just after I uploaded this, too. Barf.)
Rated Moderate for mild use of harsh language.
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Well, thank you very much for the kind words. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Your comment made me think of something, too. You mentioned delivering as much information with as few words as possible; I've more been writing this from the perspective of 'don't insult the reader's intelligence', but I suppose the two aren't mutually exclusive, are they?
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I'm curious about more this town that wasn't.
A good read.
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Thank you.
I'm curious, though: too much emphasis on the town itself in the opening paragraph? I don't mean to introduce it as a very important element of the story, because it's not.-
My first reply was a bit garbled due to being tuckered out. The town had an intriguing curiosity about it in the opening sentences. Even if it wasn't an important element of the story, it painted a rather vivid mental picture.
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Domnul Eduard
What a delightful read, I must say. I am most pleasantly surprised you put this chapter of your novel here.
I find your writing most appealing. It reminds me of the current of Realism as it feels as if it tries to delivers as much information with as few words as possible. It is well-contrived, concise, and precise, and what I like most about it: It is very, very witty, especially in that part with the 92 percent and the other 2 percent, or "These two men whose town this wasn't, seeing him, whose town this also wasn't".
Your dialogues are enticing, by the way. I like how, despite a lack of descriptions and details, they were able to immerse me and suggest me the possible accents of the characters by the mere manner in which they were written. Lovely, and lovely characters too, well outlined, and detailed, and so very reminiscent of the Realism current as they authentically portrayed the types of personages one would find in the slums of a city: queer and discomforting personages who turn to violence while they are laid decrepit by the manner of their lives, and the state of their health.
I liked this, to put it simply. It was... intriguing and most bewitching.