4 April 2014 at 02:11:45 MDT
My vacation to California was great! It also made me think about a lot of things.
On my way home from the airport, back in Massachusetts, I felt the urge to write, so...have phone, will poet.
on 4 April 2014 at 02:53:40 MDT
Thank you for sharing this. I feel in no way qualified to comment on the content, but I have noticed, that much like Shakespeare, poetry has a different...feel...when it is heard as opposed to read. Have you considered doing an audio version of this poem?
on 7 April 2014 at 19:45:36 MDT
I am strongly reminded of poetry of someone I knew intimately, many years ago. This is a good thing :) It also reminds me strongly of one of my characters, which is a very good thing (in my view, anyway).
As for the requested critique: The poem seems to not quite sure what genre it is; the first bit is religious solipsism, the other is fantastical, followed by longing (and a bit of self-pity). This is not a bad thing, just a bit unexpected; the "What is my life..." seems like it could be a separate poem.