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The Secret LAYERS of EARTH : Page 63 by JaoKuma

The Secret LAYERS of EARTH : Page 63

JaoKuma

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    Pretty good, but I found the transition between some of these pages to be a tad abruptly

    61) Alex wakes up
    62) He finds a bag with clothing, and he ... cries for some reason? Luke comes , Alex notices him
    63) Alex makes another comment about Luke being there, Alex responds and comments on the kimono that Alex is holding all of a sudden, and suddenly he's wearing it

    • When Alex says "I really don't deserve this...", why is he sad? How is it said? Is he sad and cries over what happened to him? Is he happy, crying tears of joy, and his comment is him being humble?
    • Alex notices Luke already at the end of page 62, he did say "you're back". However, none the less on page 63 he says "Welcome" ? That feels like something to start a conversation with, not follow up a statement like "you're back"
    • He is holding that kimono, but we've never once seen it. We didn't get a good glance at the bag. We didn't know what was inside.... If he pulled it out , if we saw it before then it'd make more sense

    Sorry if I come up as harsh. I'm just pointing out some stuff that I don't entirely understand, and am trying to get a better idea of what you were trying to convey.

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    • Alex woke up didn't find Luke so he did his chores ( also changed his clothes ) you can also check the time has passed from morning to late afternoon.

    • Alex cried about the care that he got from his friends from Foster Care ( Luke,Granny, other Foster kids )

    • Luke had to walk some steps from the front door to Alex's room ( Luke called Alex when he was there and cracked a " I am home honey " joke when he reached the room.

    • I did show the bags and the content of one of the bags ( they all contain used clothes )

    I can't cover and draw every second of the timeline and most of comics do time-skip