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Thebe And The Angry Red Eye by driprat
This is a story I wrote earlier his year and have been picking at ever since. I'm very proud of the story and think it's one of my best works, though it's muted reception on FA delayed my posting it here.
Though Weasyl seems a little friendlier to the written word, so we'll see how this goes.
The cover was commissioned from Sqrew and I would appreciate it if you would check out more of his art::
http://www.furaffinity.net/user/sqrew/
Thank you all and I hope you enjoy :)
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- 350
- Comments:
- 5
- Favorites:
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- Rating:
- General
- Category:
- Literary / Story
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The emotional currency invested in writing this one hasn't quite been matched by the returns, but you've helped even it out. Thank you ma'am.
Covers are sort of a give and take. If I could, the cover would be completely blank so that everything was a surprise! But I asked Sqrew to include Jupiter because it was something most everyon, even those with zero intrest in space, would recognize. I think it is probably the most recognizable object in space next to Saturn, the Moon, Earth and maybe the Sun. Thus it would make a legitimate draw.
Thank you again for taking the time :)
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I do not remember seeing this pop up in my submissions on FA, but it wouldn't be the first time this has happened. Some of the commissions I got of my character never appeared on my submissions page, but they had been posted by the artist I commissionned. FA is weird... :p
In my opinion, this is material worthy of being printed and sold in stores, or even turned into a short movie. ^^
You're right on the cover issue. It's true that Jupiter is among the very recognizable celestial objects for the people. Thinking that way makes it a very legitimate cover, even though it's a bit of a spoiler! :p
You're very welcome. I don't say it enough, and I guess a lot of people don't take the time to as well, but you art and writing skills are quite amazing. This is another proof, and Jack kept me hooked for years, with fascinating story arcs and characters that I love to see evolve and interact through the various stories that you write and draw. Thank you for taking the time to entertain me! ^^
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I'm sorry to hear that this story received such a muted reception as you put it, gives the impression no one wants to read anymore. I'm sorry it took me this long to check Weasyl to find it here as well. I've read this story more than once and have enjoyed it each and every time! I look forward to any and all other stories you post my man.
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I liked this quite a lot. It took me a few days to get through it (I don't have a lot of time these days) but the fact that I got through it says something about how interesting a read it is. As I've been a fan and reader/viewer/etc of your work for quite some time, I sort of figured I knew how it might end, and was pleasantly surprised when I wasn't quite correct. I'm sorry that it hasn't received much attention otherwise, I expect it's one of those things - the ones we work the hardest on/are the proudest of are the ones that are the least appreciated and noticed.
There were a few spelling and grammatical errors still, though not that many, and not enough to detract from the quality of the work. I enjoyed the storyline, and found myself trying to deduce just how off his rocker poor Thomas was (if at all!) at varying points in the story, which was fun.
As Neil Gaiman says, keep making good art (and writing, in this case), my friend. You are good at it. :)
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I... wow... I just read it in one go. It's just... Wow... Can't find the right words... It's one of the best things I've read for quite some years.
The way it's written in the first person, through the point of view of the protagonist makes it so captivating. And the way we slowly discovers what happened, the events before and after, the small universe that the protagonist is living in, and the quirks that he developed due to the current situation, being alone in a wrecked ship with no hope of rescue, has hooked me up after the first few lines.
My only complaint would be that the art, while gorgeous, gives away a part of the story. Or, rather, the presence of Jupiter on the picture gives it away. The great eye of Jupiter is known by most people with even a basic interest in astronomy.
But, anyway, this is a masterpiece. Bows