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Distance by Capps (critique requested)

A ticking tocking marathon
The hours running countlessly
For one with no comparison
The one that I want most to see
Is just too far away from me

Distance (critique requested)

Capps

A little cinquain I wrote while waiting for someone to get online I seriously wanted to talk to. Any feedback is appreciated!

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    Nice job!

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    Ah yeah, I remember this feeling well - the seeming eternity between log ons. Nicely written :3