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victor of the white mansion chapter 2 by 2382 (critique requested)

"Well the feast is done my Lord." "Thank you we'll go to the next town that's where the fireworks and the gun shop is right?"
"Correct my Lord you have business there your business consultant is waiting."
"Just ring if you need me" "don't worry I probably will." Whispers "our true goal is making the gun shop pay for their crappy retirement."
"yes my Lord I will go on your plan unless you don't have one"
"I have something a surprise for him!"
"Oh okay as always my Lord you always have a sharp knife up your sleeve don't you."
"Why have one when you can have 20."
As the food brought in seeing several cakes hundreds of candy bars,pies,gummy bears all the sweets you could think of.
Put on the Diner table "well today I think I'll treat my guest to some of this."
"Why thank you I don't how I can even eat any ahahah youre so kind."
starts to eat a pie "and whatever is left you chef's can have for dinner!" They all say and unison "thank you our Lord"
slicing two pies in half and eating them.
Than Eats a candy bar remembering the past when he first got his candy bar from his mom and Papa.
Remembering those kind days but then looks bitter and angry and quickly swallows down the candy bar!
Grabbing another pie and quickly slices and eats it looking almost feral on how he's eating but after 10 minutes of gorging himself!
Stops for a moment to Pat his swollen belly seeing his slightly ripped clothes.
Calling for his butlers to fix the clothing looking a little queasy from so much food and very sluggish.
"As the guest says my belly hurts and that was some good food never had that good in 20 actually six months ago!"
"that's good to know that our food is top notch."
"I'm tired" "don't worry will be going on a carriage you can sleep on the way" "okay."
"but is it normal for your belly to feel so badly bloated. That feels like you have live crabs pinching your belly sometimes."
"Hahaha funny but in all seriousness. I think we should get to the carriage" "Okay Butler's,chefs let's get rolling"
"Yes our Lord" as they go in to the carriage plopping inside. As it's a creeks quite a bit from both of their weight.
It does take a good 2 hours to get in but in as both parties begin to go.
as they are so tired they nearly completely fall asleep on the journey only occasionally glancing outside and at each other.
Before arriving "my Lord were at the destination,do you need help" "no I can get off my fat butt but my guest may need help!"
"As you wish my Lord" as he carefully helps the female out.
"Right luckily I found a place for us to stay for the 3 days will be here."
"Thank you always thinking one step ahead." "That's my job is it not."
"You're right but lets us move in right Butler's Spruce this place up!" "chefs prepare the meal for the morning!"
"Maids make sure both beds are good!" "Business Consultants carefully ready up contacts for tomorrow!" "yes our Lord"
As he begins to waddle to bed with his hanging belly "well I need to get some sleep.
I know the best way to get that gun shop a run for its money hahaha!!"
As he slowly drifts to sleep as with a flash of light the next day comes around.
"Right our Lord where do we go first" "to the fireworks place" "okay our Lord."
"Can we make a stop back to the gun shop?"
"He did want to talk to you so I don't see why not,"
"Good" as he goes with his business consultant to the fireworks company seeing the head is a squirrel.
"hello welcome to squirrely's fireworks Incorporated!" "I heard your investor" "we want to buy your company."
"Really let me get the paperwork" puts the cash on the table "I think that should be enough to avoid the paperwork!"

looks at the cash "oh I will just get the minimum paper just a legal document thank you so much" "you're welcome."
"Did you really have to pay that much more" "I didn't want to deal with the paperwork!"
"So put twice as much on it" "Yeah well then let's see this opportunity with this so-called Gun Shop!"
"Yes we should" as he simply walks the center of the town "I know this gun shop always was in the middle of everything."
"Well let's hope this fat bunny with white fur his something good. As the bell rings from the door.
"Hello son of the Wolf hahaha. I figured since you had so much cash and being as young as you are you might want to invest in my business."
"Your papa put in quite a bit of work and we know each other. And I'll give you a discount after all your young with cash."
And it takes quite a time to do good Investments. It's always best to invest in what you trust you know you do trust me right?"
"Yes but I will have to look up some things." Take much time as you need."
As sneaks off to ring the bell as the Kitsune appears saying "what do you need" "can you manipulate things" "yes."
"I have a plan in action It will take this day." "So you want me to do that. Okay I can easily do that don't worry he'll see the fine end in 24 hours!"
"That's good to know" as a plan is set in motion as "I will give you 5000 up front for product management and 1% ownership so you can restock and expand for now!"
"Thank you very much it's always a pleasure to see you make such wise Investments!"
"I'll make sure that comes right back to you." "right I'll be heading back to my home for the night." "have a good night then"
as he heads home. The next morning as the wolf goes to the gun shop. "I'm bankrupt I didn't order all those sweets where's all my inventory!?"
"Perhaps I can help you" "you had to have done something" "what could I have done."
"Everything was in order before you came and now I'm bankrupt!" "I will offer you ten thousand for everything!"
"you've got to be kidding me everything I put work into!" "it's either that or being on the street."
"fine but if your behind this you'll pay pay big time!"
"bird brain" but puts the paper down to buy the place as a wolf signs it and simply walks out.
as the Kitsune pops in "wouldn't it of been better too remove him?" "Yes but it wouldn't be as torturous." "Okay but aren't you afraid of getting in trouble?"
"Even though he surrendered a perfectly good business he can't legally get us in trouble he signed it over to us."
"And the papers actually ordering gun parts I like how you use your kitsune Magic to make it look like he was ordering cakes!"
"And use your transformation Magic to turn into the key so we could just simply hide the guns under the floorboards!"
"And now we are the owner of bunny sidearms." "on top of that it was nice of you to change his bank statement from 1 million to 0 so crafty hahaha"
"Yes my Lord but should we head back" "yes I'll need some more treats it'd be nice to see my companion."
"As you wish" as they carefully walk back as back at the house "Business Consultants right the next town over!"
"we are the business done but it's dangerous to go out at night so we should just stay here for the night."
"But if that is your wish our Lord" "so we're leaving again I guess this is interesting"
"But I just settled down on the couch." "Trust me you will want to go with me"
"But are you sure I haven't give you the rent for the room I feel bad if I didn't at least try pulls out a hundred.
"Keep it I'm rich what need would I need for that" "oh okay but I highly suggest you" "keep it" "okay I guess can't say no to such a cute face."

victor of the white mansion chapter 2 (critique requested)

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