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victor of the white mansion by 2382 (critique requested)

"Where are my sweets!" "I'll get your sweets my Lord"
"Good I'm not losing anytime here you weird little fox or should I say Kitsune!"
"don't worry what sweets would you like in particular?"
"Some chocolate cake,some candy bars and maybe a little bit of meat and some jelly donuts!"
"Okay my Lord I'm preparing the sweets I will be right back there in a couple minutes."

"Good do we have the person to give me the bath?" "Yes they are here"
"oh that's good are we running low on sweets?"
"We're doing steadily but we could cut down a little bit" "okay but I am a very hungry man."
"As I always thought my Lord." I believe the cake is done and some chocolate bars."
"The jelly doughnuts might take a little longer" "Good can you come here" "yes my Lord."
As a Kitsune slowly walks toward the lord as the Lord licks him. "why did you do that my Lord?"
"I can't simply know your taste" "I suppose" "after all don't wolves eat foxes."
"Yes but I am in your debt you did save me from poverty. So even if you were to do that I would not mind!"
"You are special to say the least but we both have our wants and needs."
Looking at the candy bar and cake seven layer cake "you're pretty good for a chef."
As he begins to pick up several candy bars stuffing them in mouth only chewing the bare minimum.
Trying to get as much as sweet candy to go down his throat.
Feeling a little bit Fuller. Takes a moment to take a deep breath in and then out.
Before picking up some of the cake slicing it in half with his Fork.
Putting the cake in his Royal hands carefully pushes most of it around his cheeks and slowly engulfs the cake into his mouth doing so for Good 2 minutes.
Before swallowing it down patting his belly from the fullness of the sweets. "well you are dismissed for now"
"as always my Lord." As another male wolf enters holding up the cleaning supplies "Well time for your bath my Lord." "Yes"
"You are a little bit Miss colored you're normally all white like a creampie But you're like some lemon cream pie now."
"Know your tongue" "sassy today my Lord" "I am sorry."
"But I always want to question you on how did you get so much money? Your grandparents we're broke your parents barely had anything?"
"So" "yet you get to inherited a mansion. Loads of cash did you make deals with demons hahaha." "And what does that mean"
"At least you have deep blue eyes. Perhaps you had a widow lover?
"Those eyes are pretty inviting for someone to at least say hello. Perhaps they are hypnotizing?"
"And last time your weighed 400 pounds? And there wasn't much negative's aside from Mobility. But I will end my questions for now my Lord goodbye ""goodbye."

"Well hopefully he doesn't ask to many more questions. I am very busy aren't we going to buy a fireworks company?"
As a business consultant that is a silver fox with green eyes.
"Yes we will lose 10% of our cash but will give us a total revenue of 25,000 within the first year."
"It's small but it will boom in sales I have very good sources. On that regard, but you do need your sleep for tomorrow.
It wil be a long day make sure to snack up on sugary treats though."
Before going to bed seeing the Donuts "I better eat them" Picks one of them up "hopefully they're grape that would be good"
as he bites into it as red jelly comes out...cherry jelly "cherries are good but not my favorite and should be ate sparingly."
"Better tell him next time not to make so much Cherry" as the Business Consultant says "yes you should cherries are very distasteful if given too much!"
"I believe I hear a knock on the door you should probably go get it." "I guess so then"
As the white wolf picks himself up slowly marching toward the door decides to carefully open it. As he sees another white wolf female with purple eyes.
"I'm sorry to be bothering you but there's no other places with lights on!"
"I'm lost I might be an adult but I get scared I can't find anyone in the town hall?
so I figured I'd ask you. "if you'd if I can like stay here for the night?" "I have a room" "oh really thank you!"
"Your room will be number 13 second floor my business consultant we'll take you there." "up this way madam" "thank you again!"
As they move "another Fortune for me I could always use a second to the house. Perhaps she will stay a lot longer than a night?
I can only think that. But I could say I have luck on my side ha ha.
Well tomorrow will be interesting having a kitsune on my side does change a lot of things.
I've been able to peer into things and anyone that wrongs me will pay.
Well I better get to sleep someone like me needs a lot of sleep to keep all the pounds Rolling on.
It may take an hour to get up there okay luckily I don't need that many blankets. Hopefully I'll be able to get some more accurate info tomorrow.
Parents have nothing, grandparents had nothing but I have something unlike them! The next morning "well where are most of my servants"
As a business consultant quickly rings a bell as most them lineup. "Right today's a very big feast a sweets feast. I want you to prepare for both me and m'lady."
They all say in unison "yes Lord" but the kitsune "we will be able to provide that much of a feast but it may take a while and be out of Sugar for a while."
"There was a terrible Harvest we'll probably have to be in another town for a while." "There's a terrible shortage" "Well then let's do it anyway!"
"As you wish my Lord."

victor of the white mansion (critique requested)

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