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Critique Wanted! by Malachyte
So no matter how I look at it, I just know the legs in this picture could be better, but I cannot for the life of me figure out what needs to change, even several weeks later. I think maybe I should squish the calves more, but that didn't really come out right as well. If you find yourself with some time and some insight, please feel free to share your advice. I'd really appreciate it!
Alternately, if there are other pieces in my gallery where you went, "That oooone part is just weird to me, I wish it were more like this", then please feel free to link to the picture and offer suggestions (or just comment on the picture itself). I often forget that usually, unless you openly invite critique, users tend to shy away from giving it for fear of a bad response. So, here is your free pass. (Just don't be a dick and make sure it's constructive, yeah?)
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That sketch helps a lot, actually. I think I had it too cemented in my head that a leg bending equals a 90 degree bend, when really there some flat area underneath the knee where things like this bar would fit into. I really appreciate the sketch and the explanation! I have it saved now, so you can remove it whenever you wish c:
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Glad I could help, and will do ^_^
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DrakeGrey basically hit it on the head. The only issue I see is that the legs bending are basically independent of the bar they're wrapped around. The thighs and calves would be squished up a bit as well, because of the pressure of closing them against it, but also because of the weight pulling down.
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Thirding that Drake's example is the problem.
I noticed recently in this one that his junk is a bit too far forward. Given the position of his hips, you wouldn't see the taint at all, and roughly half the balls would also be hidden. The only other thing that I want to point out in that one is the line weight of the nightie/dress/camisole. Having thinner lines on the "insides" of the ruffles and fabric help define subtle folds, but the "outsides" would benefit from a thicker outline. It's not a huge deal or anything, it's just that it's really distracting and my eyes keep going back to it instead of wandering around the whole image.
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Yeah, their advice definitely helped a lot.
Thanks for the extra critique on that piece, too. I really feel like my digital inks just aren't up to par with my traditional media ones, and I think a lot of it is how different the process is for me. Where I would normally ink once, erase pencil, then go over again to brighten inks and add weight, in digital you just get to ink all at once, and the program adds small weight variations for you while you're zoomed way the fuck in. When you're zoomed in, it looks like enough variety, but once you zoom out, it looks off.
And yeah, I see what you mean about the placement of the pelvic accessories. My brain has a hard time drawing "upside down", so I get way mixed up in anatomy. I'm actually trying some more sketches where people aren't so upright now, and I'm hoping that'll help a lot!
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My lines are basically make line > erase until sorta desired shape > reinforce line. I used to do stuff as one continuous line, but it just doesn't look... good. At least in my opinion. Then again, I don't think my current method of lines look good either. I'm so picky about inks, and I'm hoping that one day I can be satisfied. Just zoom way in, then fit the canvas to your window size to keep and eye on what needs work where. I got bitched at by a couple of my art teachers for not stepping back to look at things at a distance enough, so by this point it's just second nature when drawing.
Yeah nah it's totally understandable. Sure, you can rotate the canvas, but you still need to think backwards with how stuff looks right side up. I've done very little upside down images for basically the same reason. Finding references for it isn't exactly easy. :/
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i think i see the problem, the legs are too long, making it look like their calves are stubby short. i'm not very good at explaining.
if you ever want i can try redline stuff to help
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DrakeGrey
https://www.weasyl.com/submission/858857/temporary-advice-sketch
I know this isn't entirely that clear but it addresses the primary issue you're having with that pose; There's little or no interaction between the bend of the leg and the bar. You should have a small portion of the leg that curves slightly around the bar and make a bit of an indentation above it to show that the material underneath is being pushed out by the bar while the material above remains at its normal position. I'll gladly talk through what advice I have to offer here if it needs clarification and on your word I'll be fine with deleting the image I showed you here.