I'm finished with my edits.

Hopefully what I've done so far will be deemed at least acceptable, and require only minor edits here and there. Some of the suggestions involved radically restructuring the story in ways that I didn't feel would be helpful in telling the story I wanted to tell, but on the whole most of the notes were helpful and probably improved the story a great deal.

I suppose I'll have to see what Teiran and Ajax think of it now.