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I want what she's having by clubsofmeloncholy

So my senpai happysorry is getting people to critique her stuff, and thats what I want.
I want my art critiqued please.. ouo
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I want what she's having

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    writes 6 paragraph critique on your entire gallery. jk.
    ah wow. writing a helpful critique can be so hard it's no wonder people don't do it more often.

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    Are there specific things you want critiqued? I'm an art student so I've been giving peer critiques for over a year now haha, I wouldn't mind helping?

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      mm... There are things i'm working on, but anything you notice that you think can be improved.

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    You can request critique on pieces in your gallery here. It is convenient for these sorts of things x]

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    *I wanted to write this for you sooner, but was a little busy :o
    First off, I think your art is really cool. I think you have a neat style and really cool ideas. Its nice to see that you are not afraid of using colors and use pretty nifty combinations that are pretty strong!! Keep up that color business! Where your gallery as a whole falls apart is that you are including a lot of unfinished looking things. Its totally great to post sketches from time to time but creates a very sloppy disjointed presentation with the sheer amount of very sketchy posts. If there were someway to hide scraps on here, I would suggest for you to, but there isn't. Oh well! Your level of finish in your more finalized images could be pushed a bit. Some minor anatomy anomalies aside, I think you have a pretty good handle on your type of stylization; I think you would benefit from more drawing from observation.

    I think that in some of your pieces such as https://www.weasyl.com/submission/281620/sing-the-anthem-of-the-angels https://www.weasyl.com/submission/281526/boot-booty-butts and https://www.weasyl.com/submission/173935/grungey. Would be really wonderful and extremely solid images if only they had a little more finish to the linework. Your application of color and its flatness is really great but this means you need to really nail the linework. If you let some squigglyness be there, it takes away from the cleanliness of it (which is what I think you are going for most of the time). Just be weary of killing that great energy you have in these pieces. If you are going for a more hard-edge stylish sloppy lines, you need to push it more. https://www.weasyl.com/submission/316794/tigah-gurl https://www.weasyl.com/submission/281570/grooroororororo are really getting there.

    As far as anatomy goes, I think that it would better to speak more broadly then poke at a bunch of individual pieces for how to improve. Like I said before, you would benefit from drawing from observation, if you want to go the more naturalistic approach, I highly suggest a life drawing class. If this isn't available, go browsing around from some naked people or just images with bodies in them that have interesting poses or angles. Also the Lumis books are free online, these are a good resource for the budding bod drawer. Also another tip would be to get some people whose style you like and might like to emulate and see what they're doing in terms of dealing with anatomy and go from there (maybe draw from their work even! Don't be afraid to do this for practice, while some people think it is a sin, its just practice! its for growth and you don't have to show anyone)

    This piece, https://www.weasyl.com/submission/173935/grungey , has a lot of potential to me and I love it a lot actually! hehe I just think that the linework needs to be pushed. Perhaps your biggest disservice might even be using a translucent brush. Trying using an opaque brush for your lines. Your color is great and I love the stylization. I like the concept being the two characters and that background is fun and not too overdone or boring.

    https://www.weasyl.com/submission/281570/grooroororororo is also really good to me somehow. I love the design of the character a lot and I like his pose and the colors are great. I think his tail could curve a little more seamlessly that how you have it, but yeah.

    https://www.weasyl.com/submission/281553/you-re-mine works really well too. I like the characters and the acting, good poses, nice color, yada yada. I think the background works well and I just think its a lot of fun.

    In the last piece I'l talk about specifically is https://www.weasyl.com/submission/387729/jude . I think its pretty good, needs a little more work though. I think its always good to play with colored linework and such, but when you switch between colored and black linework you need to be really intentional and careful. The way the black looks on the white t-shirt is a little too jarring. The face is a little melty needs more attention to the fact that the muzzles extends from the face rather than just goes downward off of it. The hair is a little too piecey to the point that it just looks messy (in terms of the drawing, not like messy hair). You should also look at his/her right knee, its a bit incorrect. Put your own leg in that position and see how the way you are drawing it looks a little off. Sorry to be negative on this piece, I'm mostly seeing that you are trying new things here and pointing out that some of your shape language translated into this more lineless style isn't shining.

    I like that a lot of your pieces are just characters in front of solid backgrounds and a few of them are really strong, but some are not. You should try doing some pieces that have more of a concept behind them beyond just floating characters. Some jabs at backgrounds are made, albeit a little half-heartedly, and it would be nice to see more full illustrations from you! Don't be afraid to come up with cool ideas for full scenes.

    I'm sorry if this is a little all over the place! I hope that I gave you some good food for thought to munch on

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      Aaah no worries, I appreciate having the critique. I can understand using more opaque brushes at times, but I actually want to keep the somewhat non solid brushes in some of my art pieces too. This has actually given me a good perspective, and I have been putting off learning how to do REAL linework; Tracing was never something I was actually good at in drawing so doing lineart is kind of hard for me.
      I can practice using more opaque brushes from time to time, but I personally kind of like using my soft not 100% opacity brushes. I might use them with more of a consistancy so that they're as see through though.
      Thank you I appreciate you taking time to critique my work.

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        you can clean lines up and still use the nonopaque brushes while still cleaning them up is what I was meaning. I'm not trying to say you should go out and draw thing hard edged anime lines with paint bucket solid colors.
        Any linework is real linework :P
        Also, when you are drawing lines over a drawing you have already done, don't think of it as tracing, think of it as redrawing it. This has been my philosophy. I find it hard to use opaque brushes because I am very acustomed to pencils.